Topic14 2005年1月真题
Directions： For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a letter on the topic of Your Help Needed. You should write at least 150 words according to the outline given below in Chinese:
对病人的简单介绍：目前的病情和家庭情况
目前的困难:无法承担医疗费用，需要护理
望捐助:联系方式
Your Help Needed
January 8 th，2005
Dear friends，
Fm writing to you, on behalf of the Student Union, to ask for help for our schoolmate — Zhang Lin, from Class A. He, from an average family, got heavily injured in a traffic accident three days ago and was informed by doctors to require an urgent operation in one week.
Currently he is in great difficulty. To begin with, the approaching operation needs a sum of money as enormous as RMB 280，000， which is far beyond what his family can afford, with his parents been laid off work for years and two more sisters still studying in high school. What is more, his illness demands a 24-hour attending, which requires at least 3 persons to help with.
It is high time that we should help him out of the serious situation. For those who are kind enough to offer help， please phone 1234567. Also, you can go directly to our office to sign your name to take care of him by turns.Thank you for your kindness! (169 词）
Yours sincerely, Li Ming
一句话点评
毫无疑问，第二段的数据将吸引阅卷老师的眼球，同时approaching，as enormous as，far beyond，afford，laid off 等好词及短 语的使用增加了文章亮点。
快捷构思
第一段:第一句是整篇文章的交际功能的集中展现——首先 指出这是一封倡议帮忙的公开信，其中指出了“相关
性”-- on behalf of the Student Union。接下来才是本段的中心“病人的病情和家庭情况简介”。
第二段:直接展现段落中心“病人目前面临巨大困难”，而后， 用“ 一句话”表达具体困难:医疗费太高,父母下岗,姐 妹在上学，其实都是在说“无法承担医疗费用”。最 后，what’s more引出另一困难“病人需要护理”。 第三段:号召捐助，并留下具体的联系方式。
美丽词句
1.on behalf of 代表
2.He，from an average family, got heavily injured in a traffic accident three days ago and was informed by doctors to require an urgent operation in one week.(该句中的 from an average family是插入语作补充说明，是一种值得提倡的写词形成一个并列结构）
3.far beyond what his family can afford 远远超过家庭所能◎ 负担的极限
4.It is high time that we should help him out of the serious situation. (虚拟语气，作文结尾段中常出现的表“号召”的句 式，可作为模板句）